Category: CITW: Deleted Scenes

These are scenes I wrote, then later decided to go elsewhere within the chapter, but I think they’re interesting enough to share.

Deleted Scene from ‘Meet Miriam’

This scene was originally scheduled to appear at the end of the chapter. However, my beta and I agreed that the chapter was already too long and this didn’t necessarily add anything you didn’t know, so I’m sharing it as a Deleted Scene. Enjoy!

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Miriam’s POV

I pour my glass of wine and kick back. Shelby sticks her head through the door. “I’m headed out. You OK?”

“Fine.”

She waves and closes the door behind her. I call Roberto and check on him. He’s done with his homework and he and Arturo are doing father-son stuff tonight. In other words, ordering a pizza and watching wrestling.

Fine. As long as that homework is complete.

I slip off my espadrilles and get comfortable, then queue up the fourth recording. Stephanie Plum. Now that was a surprise. I wasn’t prepared for the woman I met today. I expected another soldier, another guarded, terse individual I’d have to squeeze to get details from.

The first RangeWoman? I was expecting an elite solider. Continue reading

I FINALLY Get It–Alternate Beginning

This is how Chapter 95 was going to start at one point. I scrapped this because it didn’t take me where I needed to go in this chapter.


Steph’s POV

“Steph?” I turn. Zip. “Want to try again?”

I quickly grab my things, check with Hector on 3, and join Binkie and Zip in the garage. Just like yesterday, we travel to Franklin Park and set up. It’s 0800, we have breakfast burritos from Ella and we’re feeling good, although it’s chilly. I wonder when the cold front from Boston will travel down here. I bet Mijo would love to play with some snow before he goes home.

Minutes later, he arrives.

Zip clears his throat. “Verify.” Continue reading

Deleted Scene: The Return of Maria

This is the way I originally wrote Maria’s return. This would have been in Chapter 83: The Power of a Woman, after this section:

So the league of assholes (much easier than trying to keep count of the quickly dwindling number) is silent for two days, watching her, assessing her, before they ask again. They get the same answer. Finally Nacho comes to me as the representative of their ‘concerns’.

It takes everything I have not to say ‘windows’.

“Diego, we don’t know what’s up with Maria, but she’s not cooking like she used to. It’s almost like having Ella here. Can you find out what’s wrong?”


So I called a meeting and allowed Maria to tell the men of RangeMan Miami her needs. No man was prepared for what he heard. Continue reading

Chapter 23: Temper Tantrums–Deleted Scene

If you were looking for this scene at noon and it didn’t show, I apologize. I scheduled it. No idea where the hiccup is.

Some of my best deleted scenes involve Ram! This would have been at the very end of the chapter.


My disgust with hunting aside, Ram and I stayed in the gun range to perfect my skills. I could tell Ram was having problems with my proficiency.
“Steph?”
“Yeah?”
“Why do you hate guns?”
How do you tell someone who loves guns that you hate guns because they mean death, destruction and violence? I really don’t have a way to answer this for Ram and I suppose my non-answer meant something to him.
“I’m wondering because for someone who hates guns, you’re a natural with one.”
I didn’t want to hear that.

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Chapter 59.5: We Woo, Part I–Deleted Scene

A/N: This scene would have begun after this line:

Somehow, my invitation was reinterpreted to be a group thing, which made me grumble. The guys decide to see the superhero movie I want to see and I end up sitting through a rom-com. Why did I give Steph the option? She laughs at me at the end of it.

“Enjoy it?”


Ram’s POV

I scrunch my nose, which makes Steph laugh harder. “You realize that movie could have been 20 minutes long if the leads had just talked to each other? Honestly?”

Steph stops and the smile falls from her face. “That the difference between movies and real life, Ram. In the movies, everything has a happy ending. In real life, it’s so much more complicated than that.”

I nod and wait. If you just wait, Steph will fill the silence.

“That’s why women love romantic comedies, Ram,” she says softly. “Because everything ends happily and tied up with a pretty bow. Man and woman get together and live happily ever after. The end.”

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